How the human Brain works
Firstly the human Brain is the most important organ in the human body, because it controls everything in the body.
Secondly if something hits it you will get brain damage, brain damage is when you don’t function right.
Thirdly if we didn’t have a brain we would be dead, and that's why we need brains and how it works
Kia Ora Liam, I can see that you are using firstly, secondly, thirdly to introduce your points. This is a good start.
ReplyDeleteRemember the purpose of your writing is explaining. So instead of persuading/ convincing us why the brain is important, you are explaining how it works one step at a time. For example, you can talk about how the brain controls our muscles by sending electrical signals, or you can talk about how the brain helps us to speak.