Should New Zealand open its borders?
I strongly believe that we should not open our borders.
Firstly, If New Zealand opens its borders people from other countries will come over and there wouldn’t be enough hospitals for the people who has covid.
Secondly, There will not be enough homes for the people coming over.
Thirdly, The population will be to much for the government to handle and they would need to build more home for the people from the other countries.
This is my point of view so I would like it if you told me your point in the comments of view for should New Zealand open its borders?
Hi Liam, the structure of your persuasive writing is improving. Good job on using firstly, secondly and thirdly to separate your ideas. I can also see that you are beginning to use an introduction and a conclusion.
ReplyDeleteYour next step: I would like you to add details to your paragraph. Here is an example for the first paragraph. You can discuss what would happen if our hospitals become overcrowded:
- Hospitals may not have enough ventilators and doctors/ nurses to treat every patient. This means that some patients can lose their lives.
- Doctors and nurses can become very stressed and this will negatively impact their health.
Keep it up Liam!
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