I strongly believe that we (Seniors) should have a new playground.
Firstly, If we get a new and exciting playground the senior school doesn’t need to go on the middle playground.
Secondly, The playground is not safe for kids and adults. Also it's made of steel! That is so hard and heavy. So if somebody hits their head , arm or leg on it they will get badly injured.
Lastly, The playground is boring, because it has no slide or swing. Those two are the funnest things to do on a playground.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Hey Liam! Great job on our writing! I really like how you opened up your writing by saying "I believe"
ReplyDeleteNext time you could probably list the reasons about what you think about it.